Final Draft

Final Draft

Step 1 Read the Essay Project 2 Assignment Sheet…

Step 2 Complete Writing Task 11

Please complete the revision checklist for your essay.

Step 3 Complete the final draft of your essay

Follow the guidelines in the assignment letter for the essay. Use all the feedback you were given from your classmates and instructor to polish your draft. Use all of the information you have learned so far in the course about writing to improve your final product. This should be a complete draft, not the just the initial draft used for the peer review.

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My Rough Draft :

Staying true to all America’s children’s promise

While it is widely accepted that all children need to get a world-class education, disabled children are left behind and are disadvantaged in many educational aspects. This is a speech that was delivered by Secretary Arne Duncan. The audience was the Council for Exceptional Children and the speech was delivered on the 21st day of April, in the year 2010. Arne Duncan seeks to sell the idea of embracing children with disability in education, providing them with appropriate opportunities so as to ensure that every child gets a world-class education. This is an effective argument that Arne uses and it arguably must have achieved its objectives. For an argument to hold, it needs to have elements that work.


The author has made use of assumptions. Very often arguments are basically made of assumptions in either stated or unstated forms. The speaker makes an assumption that he and the president, Obama had the same belief that all children needed world-class education. While this may be true, the speaker may not be able to ascertain what Obama or any other person believed. Beliefs cannot be proven and spoken of with authority, especially if they are beliefs related to another person. The speaker, therefore, makes an assumption that Obama held the same belief that he had and he doesn’t seem to make any effort to ascertain the authenticity of the belief. This is an effective way of arguments since it enables the audience to be swayed in their perception of the issue at hand. Arguably, arguments seek to change peoples’ opinions as it is impossible to have people agree on a particular behavior.


The speaker has made use of pathos in presenting his thoughts and argument. The speech is rich in emotional appeal as a strategy that the speaker uses to have the attention and sympathy of the audience. People are easily convinced and their opinions changed when there are attempts to appeal to their emotions. The speech makes it clear that there is nothing more devilish and malicious when it comes to “education than the conviction that disabilities and demography are destiny–that the burdens of poverty, disability, and race mean the children cannot really succeed and should be treated with low expectations” (Duncan). This is a statement that resonates well with the emotions of people and the audience was bound to turn sympathetic to the disabled children. When this happens, it is not hard to have people’s opinions changed in any matter and therefore the speaker is successful in the application of this strangely.


There is widespread usage of the strategy of logos throughout the speech. The speaker makes use of this by trying to appeal to the people’s reasoning as a way to reach out to them and have them persuaded. This was apparently meant to have them change their opinions on the issue at hand. The speaker is successful in this strategy as he appeals to the reasoning of his audience and tries to arouse their reason by use of thought-provoking arguments. He indirectly calls them to action by appealing to their logic and making it appear unpopular to let the disabled children stay behind in education. Arne tactfully makes use of the past since people easily relate with the past than with the future. He points out to the past where the disabled children were ignored by public schools. This was a sure way to ensure that the denied the disabled children entry in public schools and those who were lucky to secure entry could not get individualized instruction. He puts their reasoning to task by giving the statistics and making it clear that the numbers were not small.


The speaker has made use of bias. The speech is skewed towards the disabled children and the argument may not hold if the bias is taken away. The speaker presents disabled children as vulnerable and deprived. This may not necessarily be true. The speaker is effective in this application of bias and there is no doubt that the results were promising. It is worth noting that overemphasis on an underprivileged or deprived group ends up depriving the group that was not deprived initially.


The speaker has made use of the strength of the argument. By use of statistics, the speaker was trying to put more weight in his points so that they become more believable.


The speech by Arne was a successful attempt. It comes as an argument that has several strategies that are effectively used. It is indisputable that the speech achieved its goals.

Works Cited

Duncan, Arne. “Keeping the Promise to All America’s Children.” Council for Exceptional Children, 21 Apr. 2010, U.S. Department of Education. United States of America. Speech.